Its a lot of writing, good work. Maybe next time you could add a bit more colour to the post, you could add some colour to the writing on your drawring, it's and bit hard to read.
Kia ora i'm Zack from Yaldhurst Model School. I enjoyed how you added a picture and there is lots of writing. Did you think about adding some more at the top of your post you could mabey do a paragraph so people know more about what you are doing. Mabey next time you could add pictures on all of the things instead of just one BYE.
Kia Ora, Teryn I am Zack from Yaldhurst Model School.
I Really enjoyed reading this blog post because you got right to the point and I also liked how you added a picture about what you did on your work I like this because then people might want to do the same thing. Also adding pictures make people get the picture in their heads so they can see more about your blog.
You brought me back to when we went to woodend camp because this blog is partly about camp. It also gave me a memory about the time when the year 8's went to wellington and we did not have many people in out class and we did lots of fun things while they were gone. Did you think about saying what people liked about the camp so other people can know if its a good camp or not.
Next, time you could think about doing some more words so that people really get what you are talking about and people will think that is good and try and do that on their blogs. You could also add some more pictures instead of just one picture. The last thing you could do is add some more feelings on what you liked about this.
What made you do this blog? Why did you go on camp?
Kia ora Teryn! My name is Hana and I'm a year 5 from Yaldhurst Model School!
Wow! I love the blog post! It's interesting that you got to choose an animal and research it!
Is the Eel your favourite animal? My favourite animal is probably a dolphin, or a cat, or maybe a lion. I don't have an exact favourite animal, so they are just some animals that I like, but their not my favourite. I don't have a favourite colour ethier :P.
Also, I tried to access the things you found out about Eels, but I don't know how.
Hi Teryn, I am Olivia from Yaldhurst Model School. I think I love that you write about the year 7/8,s camp. I love to know that you like the year 7/8,s and you want to write about it. I think that next time you can write a bit more about it not just a couple of sentences. Other then that I think it was spectacular. Great Work. From Olivia.
Hi Teryn, I am Ethan from yms I think that it was a great that you added other years I think it was brilliant I like Eels do you like them to? But next time add a bit more writing bit otherwise great jo and the 7/8s you don't just add 5/6s.
HI there Tyran My name is Jonathon I am a year 6 from yaldhurst model school. I also think I quite like ells but before you do your blog post you could tell us a bit more and have a catchy title . YOur picture or slide or whatever it is I cannot access is there a way you could make it so I can access it?? Thankyou Jonathon.
There is lots of writing in here great job but maybe next time tell us more about Eels, You could also say why you chose Eels because usually theres a reason.
Also I couldn´t see you photo or slide so maybe change it so that we can see it because I bet whatever it was, Was super cool but I couldn´t see it, Which is sad.
Was your camp fun? Where did you go? Next time just include where you went, If it was fun and try and get it so we can see the photo. But apart from that, Great work. From Thom.
Kia ora Mykiala here from yaldhurst school. This is a great blog post. I like it. Next time you should make sure the photo works. Great job anyway. Keep it up.
Kia ora Tyran, My name is Rhys I am a year six from yaldhurst model school. I quite like ells and they are gross but cool. But before you post you should tell us a bit more about it and try get a catchy title. maybe next time you can make sure you can access it because I can't. Is there a way you could make it so I can access it?
Hi Teryn, My name is Sebastian and I go to Yaldhurst Model School. Your blog post reminds me of when we went to Willowbank and I saw eels. I went to Rimu camp. The was a year 3 to year 4 camp. It was fun going to camp with my whole class. We did not see Eels at our camp. I have enjoyed your story Teryn. Thank you for sharing with everyone.
Kai Ora Teryn I'm Alvin from YMS I enjoyed the part when you said you chose ells did you think about drawing a eel how come you like a eel do you have one? did you like the trip and where did you go I want to know because we might of gone to! Alvin
Hi my name is Ethan from yaldhurst model school I like that you have added lots of detail and there is lots of lots of detail in this boxes. next time you can add more sentence and soul and make sure it makes some sense so that we can read it properly no offence though.
Kia Ora Teryn. Its Kaleb here from Totara 2.
ReplyDeleteIts a lot of writing, good work. Maybe next time you could add a bit more colour to the post, you could add some colour to the writing on your drawring, it's and bit hard to read.
Kai Pai Teryn... Keep up the good work.
From Kaleb.
Kei tawhiti koe son! Rawe te kite i a koe e whakamahi ana i te reo māori! ko koe tonu kei ruka! Aroha mutunga kore e te tau
ReplyDeleteKia ora i'm Zack from Yaldhurst Model School. I enjoyed how you added a picture and there is lots of writing. Did you think about adding some more at the top of your post you could mabey do a paragraph so people know more about what you are doing. Mabey next time you could add pictures on all of the things instead of just one BYE.
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ReplyDeleteheeeeeeey great job you hav won $1000000000000000000000000 see me at big fort luch time at your school on the 19th of june 2019
ReplyDeleteKia Ora, Teryn I am Zack from Yaldhurst Model School.
ReplyDeleteI Really enjoyed reading this blog post because you got right to the point and I also liked how you added a picture about what you did on your work I like this because then people might want to do the same thing. Also adding pictures make people get the picture in their heads so they can see more about your blog.
You brought me back to when we went to woodend camp because this blog is partly about camp. It also gave me a memory about the time when the year 8's went to wellington and we did not have many people in out class and we did lots of fun things while they were gone. Did you think about saying what people liked about the camp so other people can know if its a good camp or not.
Next, time you could think about doing some more words so that people really get what you are talking about and people will think that is good and try and do that on their blogs. You could also add some more pictures instead of just one picture. The last thing you could do is add some more feelings on what you liked about this.
What made you do this blog?
Why did you go on camp?
BYEEEE Zack from Yaldly
Kia ora Teryn! My name is Hana and I'm a year 5 from Yaldhurst Model School!
ReplyDeleteWow! I love the blog post! It's interesting that you got to choose an animal and research it!
Is the Eel your favourite animal? My favourite animal is probably a dolphin, or a cat, or maybe a lion. I don't have an exact favourite animal, so they are just some animals that I like, but their not my favourite. I don't have a favourite colour ethier :P.
Also, I tried to access the things you found out about Eels, but I don't know how.
What campsite did the year 7s and 8s go to?
Hi Teryn, I am Olivia from Yaldhurst Model School. I think I love that you write about the year 7/8,s camp. I love to know that you like the year 7/8,s and you want to write about it.
ReplyDeleteI think that next time you can write a bit more about it not just a couple of sentences. Other then that I think it was spectacular.
Great Work.
From Olivia.
Hi Teryn, I am Ethan from yms I think that it was a great that you added other years I think it was brilliant I like Eels do you like them to? But next time add a bit more writing bit otherwise great jo and the 7/8s you don't just add 5/6s.
ReplyDeleteBye For now Ethan
HI there Tyran My name is Jonathon I am a year 6 from yaldhurst model school.
ReplyDeleteI also think I quite like ells but before you do your blog post you could tell us a bit more and have a catchy title .
YOur picture or slide or whatever it is I cannot access is there a way you could make it so I can access it??
Thankyou Jonathon.
Kia ora Teryn, I´m Thom from Yadlhurst school.
ReplyDeleteThere is lots of writing in here great job but maybe next time tell us more about Eels, You could also say why you chose Eels because usually theres a reason.
Also I couldn´t see you photo or slide so maybe change it so that we can see it because I bet whatever it was, Was super cool but I couldn´t see it, Which is sad.
Was your camp fun? Where did you go?
Next time just include where you went, If it was fun and try and get it so we can see the photo.
But apart from that, Great work.
From Thom.
Great work anyway.
Kia ora Mykiala here from yaldhurst school.
ReplyDeleteThis is a great blog post.
I like it.
Next time you should make sure the photo works.
Great job anyway.
Keep it up.
Mykiala YMS
Kia ora, I'm Zahrah from Yaldhurst Model school. I liked the way you wrote about going to camp. How come you went to camp. Why did you went to camp.
ReplyDeleteRegards Zahrah
Kia ora Tyran,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Rhys I am a year six from yaldhurst model school.
I quite like ells and they are gross but cool. But before you post you should tell us a bit more about it and try get a catchy title.
maybe next time you can make sure you can access it because I can't.
Is there a way you could make it so I can access it?
Kind regards
Rhys
Hi Teryn,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Sebastian and I go to Yaldhurst Model School.
Your blog post reminds me of when we went to Willowbank and I saw eels. I went to Rimu camp. The was a year 3 to year 4 camp. It was fun going to camp with my whole class. We did not see Eels at our camp. I have enjoyed your story Teryn. Thank you for sharing with everyone.
guys teryn moved to paroa school he does not go to gms anymore sorry
ReplyDeleteKai Ora Teryn I'm Alvin from YMS I enjoyed the part when you said you chose ells did you think about drawing a eel how come you like a eel do you have one? did you like the trip and where did you go I want to know because we might of gone to! Alvin
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Ethan from yaldhurst model school I like that you have added lots of detail and there is lots of lots of detail in this boxes. next time you can add more sentence and soul and make sure it makes some sense so that we can read it properly no offence though.
ReplyDeleteKind regards Ethan